Initial Idea - Teacher Feedback

25/01/10


We told Miss our initial idea for the first time today, and she gave us some constructive feedback. Here is a summary of what she said:

• She reminded us of the importance of the titles, and how they would fit with the images.
• She said that having the victim looking out of the second window was too much, and put in that situation the victim would have climbed out of the widow and taken his chances on the roof.
• She suggested that the victim attempts to fight back once the man has found him (an idea that we had previously discarded).
• We discussed how we could keep the sequence under the given 2 minutes.

Titles

We have decided that if possible, we are going to try to integrate the titles into the mise-en-scene, such as on walls, on the ground, etc. To find out how much we can to with the titles, we have booked a session on the mac to see exactly what we can do.

The second window

This was not really sorted during the feedback, as we began something else, and as it stands, the victim still opens the window and looks out, retreating as he sees there is no way down.

The fight scene

We originally scrapped the fight scene because we didn't believe we could do it properly and make it look good, however taking on board Miss's words, we have come up with an alternative to a full-blown brawl. When the victim is found, he attempts to disarm the man, who easily shrugs him off and then knocks him out. We think this is a great way to end the scene in a dramatic way.

Time keeping

For the scene to be effective we need at least a full minutes for the sequence in the room when the two meet, so to save the other minute, both characters will remain anonymous, there will be no or very little dialogue, and nothing will be given away as to how they got into this situation.